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Black Cat Lady : 1

This is a not-good story from me :) Hope you understand this story

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Black Cat Lady

Sun shows its smile on that entire city. Somehow it smiles too bright that no rain pours for months.

12.00 a.m.

People out for lunch. With traffic full of people and cars, a little touch can make big tension among others. Hunger figures crawl on the road, trying to find their own ways to find a nice cafe or bar to fill their belly.
Far from that crowd. An elegant black creatures with it tremendous claws shine as an adamantine. Lay down in laziness, her eyes which as pure as ruby look carefully on her prey. It’s the same prey. In silent she gets up and walks carefully toward that same-prey. Oh, what a stupid prey, she thinks. Fast, she stabs her claws on its neck. Make a big hole and suddenly a fresh fluid burst out from the neck and covers the floor. Stupid prey….

“MINI !”

A girl enters the room with panic. She holds that same-prey and at the same time looks at The Killer with anger.

“How many times I’ve told you! Don’t make the floor dirty, Mini!” She throws that same-yellow-prey to a bin next to her. “Now I have to clean this floor again. We don’t have that many mice here, okay? So please take care of toys I bought for you.”

After say that, that girl start to wipe the floor with tissue and leave the room with her ipod on to meet her boy friend on the other room.

Lying down, this ruby-eyed creature realized how this girl grew up and changes. Three meters from its place, this black figure can see how this girl kiss her boyfriend. And believe, it is not a little girl's kiss.. It is a woman's kiss

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“A Black Cat Lady!”

A little girl shouted so hard

“Look at this cat! I want this cat! I’ll name it Black Cat Lady!”

With ridiculous smile and big eyes opened, that little girl holds a black cat tightly on her chest. Even though her mom refuses to adopt it, this little girl still holds the cat-almost killed it. But what can Mom do? With love to her daughter, now she is driving her car to a pet store and buy cat stuffs

Since then, that cat was called as “Lady” and become a main member of this house. Margareth-name of that little girl- will cry if Lady not sleeps beside her. Margareth will smile so bright even though she just fall down as long as Lady beside her. Every day Margareth broom its fur slowly liked broom a $10000 pet. In fact, it’s just a dirty cat from an unknown street. When Margareth there, Lady also there. Where Lady is, where Margareth is. Some people think maybe they should bring them to a hospital and see if they are siblings.

Funny isn’t it?

That was 5 years ago.
Now, she is no longer a girl with pink socks and polka dot dress. She is no longer a girl who hate boys as they are dirty part of this world that should be vanished. She is no longer a girl who like to cry a lot. Now, she loves a tiny square-shape white box that can play music which its long white rope can be put on ear to hear it privately. She loves slim box which shows you video from who she talks to. It’s a magic box. She can spend hours in front that magic box with her fingers do a tap dance on it. She loves a box which full of catalogs so she can choose which clothes are good, which hats are match with her bags, and many more. She loves boxes, isn’t she?

And now? Is Margareth still loves Black Cat Lady? Is Margareth still want to groom and sleep with Black Cat Lady? Is Margareth still cry if she can't find Black Cat Lady anywhere? Is Margareth still thinking that they are siblings before they reincarnation? Is Margareth...

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3.00 p.m.

Three hours since she finds her last prey. She thinks about Margareth too much until falls asleep. Where is Margareth?

She looked around and still can not find her master. She go to kitchen. Maybe she is trying a new kind of diet again? No one in the kitchen. Ah, bathroom ! Maybe she is trying her new conditioner she bought yesterday. No? No one in the bathroom.

After one hour searching her master, (actually only 10 minutes with 40 minutes watch television and 10 minutes eat cat snacks in good apetite), she thinks again, where is Margareth?

Okay, now she is ready to search her master again. Now she tries to step on stairs. May be Margareth is on second floor. Little slip. And another slip. And another slip. Oh my ! They have to change this stairs ! Not from a marble! From rocks maybe !

After 20 steps full of danger (3 meters height), she find Margareth standing in front of her room with towel wrap her body. There is long white rope on her ears with tiny white box on her hands. Oh, I hope someone pull out that rope off her ears ! I can't imagine when that rope and her ears become one. As Black Cat Lady wishes, that rope is being pulled out off her ears. But now, that rope wrap her master's body almost too tight. Margareth shout and jump. But she can't. Someone hold her body so tight that she can't move her body. Her face shows panic.

"Hey, you shocked me!"

Margareth turn her body around and face this "criminal".

"You'll liked it."

He whispers to her ears and hug her.

Black Cat Lady looks at that guy. A nice guy. Good looking guy. His body is okay, not bad. It shows how many hours he spent on gym to carve his body. Okay, his body is also nice. He is her master's girlfriend. New one. The nicest one.

Suddenly Margareth kisses his lips and put her naked arm around his neck. This good looking guy holds her body tighter than before. He opens her lips a little bit and slip his tongue in. Slowly, he touches her back and pulled off her towel. He let it fall on the floor. He presses her naked body on the wall without loosen up his kiss a little bit. Yet, their kiss become more intense. He doesn't only kiss her lips, but also her neck, her ears, everywhere. They forgot that they are not alone in this house. There is a Lady near them. A Lady who still stand and watch them

She is no longer my little girl. She is my Margareth right now, not my little Margareth

Silently, Black Cat Lady step out and return to her beloved bed. Better not disturb them right now. What can I do? I just a cat, an old female cat. Black Cat lady lays on her bed. She close her eyes, waiting for another prey. Later when I found a prey, I'll stab my claws and tears it into pieces..

She falls asleep, dreaming she is in an island full of fat stupid prey. She stabs her claws and break them into pieces.

She smile

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do you understand my story? Ahahaha.. I hope so. My English is not good and I'm not a good writer. This is my first time to write a story ever :) This is the first part. What do you think? I need help from you

1. Correct my English grammar and vocabulary
2. Which part I should improve?
3. Which part I should delete?
4. Over all what do you think of this story? Boring? Ahahaha that's okay :)

28 comments:

mollee said...

nice write ...... keep learn and practice

Dark Read said...

nice... site that write can practice

Joko Purwono said...

long story,
but I do not know what that means,

Deddy Irawan said...

I am getting sick head reading English Story =(
My English only got C when in collage hahah

Amelia said...

@molle : thank you
@dark read : thank you
@joko : It's just a story about black cat lady, the first unfinished part. so I can understand why you cannot get the meaning of it
@deddy : Yeah, because I made this blog for English post only. So If you get C in college, I don't blame you for not understand it

mynameishamski said...

sad story T_T
feel bad for the black cat..

keep writing! XD

foodphilo said...

the story is interesting, i would say. i can see some influence from Michelle Paver :)
keep writing

ina said...
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ina said...

they are like siblings?? hahaha...
it's so funny...

although her mother did not like the cat, but she loved Margareth....

nice story, friend!!!

Multibrand said...

Hi,

I like your story.
Don't worry too much on your English,
it's not your mother tongue.

Free Your Mind said...

everything can be changed, maybe someday black cat lady will find her happiness ^_^

Amelia said...

@mynameishamski : Thank you.. I still don't know this will be sad or happy story.. ahahah Later I decided it.

@foodphilo : Thank you. Err.. who is michelle paver? Sorry I don't have good memories of names

@ina : AHahahah not only you who think it's funny.. It's imposible for me and I don't know why i wrote that way :p

@multibrand : Thank you :) yes, it's not my mother tongue :)

@Free your mind : Yap :) I want it that way too.. But I'm still thinking.. how? :)

Thank you for your support :)

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Amelia said...

@freezipe : Thank you :)
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pusat promosi gratis said...

I like that story. Nice one. I think you are a good writer, better than me ;)
About the grammar, how about this :
- since she finds her last prey >> since she found her last prey
- She go to kitchen >> She goes to the kitchen
- with towel wrap her body >> with a towel wraps her body
Since I have a lack in english (too), let's discuss it. Because I don't believe that my suggestions above is right. Wahahaa..

Amelia said...

@pusat promosi gratis : Ah, thanks :) Ya, ya, your suggestion is correct.. I didn't realize it :) Thanks :)

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Amelia said...

@fatur : thanks :)
@beauty : thx :)

both of you have great blog ! And much more better than mine, you know :)

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